Blaze Battle / BBT - inVersed vs jaguarkid140

Please post your battles here. After both are posted a poll will be added and they will be voted on over the weekend. Most votes after then wins. If there is a tie the vote will stay open until another vote is cast.

Also remember:

- No posting until BOTH battles are posted. Feedback can wait till after both are up and if it is posted before then it will be deleted.
- Battles must be between 15-20 lines long. No more, no less.
- Voting will start once both battles are posted.
- Winner moves on to the semi-finals where they will face the winner of the Fish vs JDP match-up.

Deadline to post battles is Friday July 16th at 11:59 PM EST.

Failure to post prior to the deadline will result in disqualification from the tournament.

Good luck.

Welcome to the crime scene, unzip the body bag
Within it are the remains of some sad kid named jag
So much dirt on JK140, we should call in the dredges
Your rhymes are like your terrain, pretty rough around the edges
The microphone is a weapon that I grab, cock, and blow.
Jaguars like a bitch watch him grab cock and blow
Can't stop my flow, lyrically you're like a dry-towel, get it, out of synch
Forget near threatened, my rhymes make your rap career extinct
Who needs a jag when I'm like the bentley of this rap game
Why was this novice allowed to enter; quite frankly its a damn shame
Despite the fact you're just 14, I refuse to go soft
Before you post your verse, have mom turn your parental controls off
What do all your submissions and your rhymes have in common- they fail
I murdered a minor with my words, please don't throw me in jail
Remember, my lyrics are as cold as the wind in late decembers
Headline read "inVersed just dismembers one of the site's most hated members"
Goodnight.

Listen to the shit, you call that a beat?
It's so pathetic, because I'm not very old.
I'm afraid this Jag will have to give you a defeat.
You're not one to talk, you think you're so bold.
Not even an accolade, why not a gold?
You've been here since late '03, getting burned to the 3rd degree
Whats the point of NE, makes me so sick, doesn't give energy
Regret facing the wraith?
'Cause when I'm done with you, you'll be in half
Like I said before, you have no accolade, I guess I doubt you'll ever get laid.
Nor paid, cause this guy's gonna steal the show.
What's the point of this, I'm not even trying
But compared to your words, it seems like you're dying.
Here's the underdog, about to take the act
But you, InVersed, cannot face the fact.
I'm wasting my time, plowing through grime
Though the cops will never consider the crime
'cause it's a waste of time
I wonder who's going to take the hit
'cause I'll beat you easily in one spit.

@InVersed: Wow. There's some really clever lines in there, especially the whole "Jag vs Bentley" line and the different uses of "cock and blow."

@Jag: You put up a decent fight, but InVersed is the #1 seed in this for a reason.

WINNER (IMO) : InVersed, by far

Good battle guys!

I really liked the bentley line, inVersed, and the steal the show line, jag!

I guess I doubt you'll ever get laid.

really?
he's a black athlete in a predominantly white midwest city school.
no offense, but hearing a 14 year old say that line made me LOL


nice battle though.
inversed is the clear winner in my opinion.

Ah well, I knew I'd probably loose.

Good battle guys!

I really liked the bentley line

I actually laughed at that line too.

Good battle, JK140! Your verse was a lot better than I expected

Like I said before, you have no accolade, I guess I doubt you'll ever get laid.

Oh man, this made me laugh so hard. I mean; what better to get a girl into bed than a nicely themed rollercoaster? xD

Good battle, JK140! Your verse was a lot better than I expected

Thank you, I used to do this kind of stuff all the time.

Easily inversed (it's been a while btw!), but like others have said, gotta respect jag for not making it as embarrassing as it could be. inversed's closing was just too much

It seems like everyone thought I would do a lot worse.

Alright alright Inversed you got the flow and the substance. But where's the variation.

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It's obvious that you beat jag but I wanna see some damn variation. Jag's words were meaningless but at least he had that variation:

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IDK, Wanted, I mean I feel like I had enough variation considering I through in a fair share of interior rhymes. Remember/december/dismembers/members; grab cock and blow/grab, cock, and blow/cant stop my flow. I will agree that I need to try to rhyme the same sound more than i did like:

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But I don't feel like the type of variation your talking about is all that necessary when writing a rap and I am a hip hop head/rapper, I guess I associate that type of rhyming more so with poetry than anything.

It's tough to compare based only on end of bar rhymes. With rap there is generally mid-line rhymes as well as the noticable ones at the end of each bar. You'll notice that in my verse near the end, I used a lot of "A" sounds (including in German) even though those are not the sounds heard at the end of the lines. Hell, I probably make some words sound similar in my head that are totally different should one have a different local accent than myself.

With poetry, the pace and rhyme is typically more strict than with rap. Though I see the similarities, I have a hard time using rhyme as the only key to one's lyrical abilities.

True accents play a huge part in rhymes.

I'm glad that you see what I'm talking about though Inversed with the same sound thing. You are obviously a great rapper which is why I want to see you take it to the next level