Screenshot / West Water (Progress)

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  Comment System Offline

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  posted 4 years ago

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  posix Offline

  Please use #wip-feedback on our discord for incremental updates like that. The frontpage is intended for mainly finished screens.

  posted 4 years ago

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  FK+Coastermind Offline

  Echoing posix, the frequency and size of screens you're posting can make it difficult to know how to give constructive feedback, which may be part of why you aren't getting a lot of comments. Focusing in, or moving to the work-in-progress discord might help.

   

  Overall, I think you have a lot of interesting textures and forms going on in the screen, which is great for a newer player. But, the composition and how you are organizing those different elements makes it hard to ready and a bit chaotic. I'd recommend more thinking about how you orient different components of each area to emphasize some of the unique forms rather than overwhelm them. Taking some time to look at how other's have done so would be a good first step.

   

  That being said, I know you hit the object limit, so this may be something to carry into your next project.

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  Xtreme97 Offline

  The sand could be a lot less bare I think. There are some very interesting elements here however, like the turnaround on the right and the ship below it.

  posted 4 years ago

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