Park / ZoomZoom

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  posix Offline

  The lack of main ride exposure I mentioned in Crazy Mine is obviously solved here. Well done! Complete opposite.
  
  Otherwise I'm having a hard time to reason why I think this is about the same quality. It's good and nice to look at, but somewhere at 65% for me, so just barely a design.
  
  Again, I get the sense it needs more clarity. The path layout doesn't really guide my eyes well. The theme is a bit too ambiguous. Perhaps the greens are also a little too overpowering as they have to compensate for lack of content.
  
  I really like the entrances of your queue lines though. Especially this one here is fantastic.

  posted 11 years ago

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  posted 11 years ago

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  dawidox Offline

  Thanks for your criticism Posix and that you consider this an about 65%!
  I always have a problem with conceptional building. Mostly I start with the coaster. I have an idea for the Layout (which I really like in this one). My theming creativity isn't really a match to the many of you, though. I build this huge recreation structure second and wanted the coaster to interact with this (which I also think worked well). BUT: the theming itself is a mess, I really know that, which is because I'm still experimenting and trying to get a feeling for architecture. The buildings in the street aren't bad I think, yet I know they are pretty redundant. The buildings around the carusel don't fit in the design at all, but due to lack of inspiration I left them in, which was not my smartest move;) overall I'm not discontent with this, since it is an improvement of more than 10% regarding my first submission. And since I just using CSO since this years April I do consider myself on a good way towards an accolade.
  Thanks to you admins, to you panelist and everybody who's commenting this! I'd love to hear as many opinions about this as possible.
  What do you guys think foliage wise, flow wise, ..., overall wise?
  
  Thanks and Auf Wiedersehen

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  Hex Offline

  To me the architecture was really nice towards the first loop of the coaster. Then the architecture away from the coaster was bland and boring. The layout was different. I really like the revers dive inversion after that curve after the first loop. The only thing I didn't like about the layout was the brake section, I think you could have pulled off a better execution.
  
  All this stuff is pretty easy to fix, and if you do this in your next project I'm sure you'll get an accolade!
  
  -S.C.

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  dawidox Offline

  Thanks S.C. What didn't you like exactly about the Break run. That it didn't run but rather lurked into the breaks? I just didn't want to extend the layout too far towards the lake at this part and I also needed a decent high to have the coaster be fast enough for the looping and the rest of the layout.

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  Arjan v l Offline

  ^^ I.m.o. , the brake acted a bit too soon, it almost felt like the train could go backwards.
  It would've looked better if the brake acted a little later.
  You've build a floor less B&M coaster, so you've also missed points there, since those coasters have double catwalks.
  Also the supports were unfinished at places and the two supports at the turn around half loop by the queue, were incorrectly constructed, i was wondering how that could support that half loop correctly.
  
  You have some nice interaction going on though.
  There's some nice interaction at the cobra roll, but that could've been so much better, if it didn't looked forced, like it does now.
  
  I'll show you what i mean:
  
  
  
  The path in the black crossed area shouldn't have been there, so peeps are forced to cross the bridge, wich would've been a better way.
  Now you have two choices... go around or cross the bridge, wich gives me the feeling that the bridge is forced interaction.
  I hope you know what i mean.
  
  The architecture was nice, but that light blue building stuck out too much.
  I liked the use of a train, it always adds to the design.
  Please add peeps also, they contribute to the atmosphere.
  
  You wanted comments?
  
  Well here you are, i hope it helps.

  posted 11 years ago

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  dawidox Offline

  Thanks a lot Arjan! First I need to explain one more thing about this break. I put the block break so "early" Because otherwise the timing would've been odd. But I know what you mean, so next time I'd rather go the extra mile and set other departure times than awkward break positions. Thanks for the hint. Also I didn't think about the double catwalk thing, because for me the double catwalk looked a little too bulky. I will consider this next time!
  As for the bridge: The bridge was first. I've always wanted to make a cobra roll-bridge combination. I build the path behind the cobra roll afterwards because I had no better use for the place behind the roll, which I won't do again after your advice! (By the way I really appreciate you going the extra mile with the screenshot! Thanks)
  I was also too lazy too support every bit of the last section of the coaster and I don't know why, but I always (which means since this years April, since I started CSO then) trouble with supporting loops... Is there something like a support tutorial in the forums?
  Well for the blue building... I cramp it in, for the heck of it. Though I knew no one would like it there I left it in. Since I'm still experimenting with the game I just tried some few things out in this design, not thinking about their harmony. Also one could consider it a homage to pac and Mav because I saw something like it in pacs starpointe and Mavs Hudson Crossing park.
  As for the peeps, I simple forgot to open the park before submission, and I instantly knew that this would be another let down to this...
  
  I'm very grateful for your comment and advice and especially that you kept your word! Have a good one and take care bro'!
  
  Auf Wiedersehn

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  Hex Offline

  I didn't like how it barely made it up at the break run. IMO it was too high and I didn't like the non-banked turn right before it either. Normally bank runs don't have a sharp curve before a break run, because normally the coaster is still traveling a decently-fast speed.
  
  -S.C.

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  Mattk48 Offline

  I would have voted 65 percent purely because this is the best name in the history or coaster names. All jokes aside, this is a huge improvement from your first submission. Looking forward to your next one

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  dawidox Offline

  ^^ I understand the point you're making. Next time I will execute the break run differently. (Though as I mentioned earlier I had some good reason to build it as I built it)
  
  ^ ZoomZomm was the slogan in Mazda commercials for quite a long time. (I'm not a Mazda fan but I though that'd funny to use here as I could think of a good name I decided to give it a ridiculous name;)

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  zburns999 Offline

  The second inversion alone was almost enough for me to give it the necessary 65%.

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  dawidox Offline

  The second inversion alone was almost enough for me to give it the necessary 65%.
  

  
  

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